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It is not a secret that * does not have enough natural resources for example oil, gas or metals. And as a result of political situation in the region we almost separated from the world. The mountainous relief makes transportation very difficult inside the country. All these factors are making difficult the import of resources and is disadvantageous to keep industry which need of them. In my opinion our country must give attention to technological fields and particularly to information technologies. Because this field needs only minor investments and qualified people resources. Creating flexible economic field with low tax rates, creating opportunities to educate cheap ,but highly qualified workforce it must attract international companies to open their branches here. And also one very important fact that information technology products is very agile. No matter it is software, micro schema layout or aircraft strength design,it can be delivered to a customer within a few seconds in an every place in a world. May dream is to contribute for the development of this technologies in my country. And this is reason why I chose my profession and why I want to continue my education in this field. After having graduated from * University, I hope that I would not only perfect in the information technology but also learn the western way of doing business in this field and what labor is required for it. All my subsequent activities will be directed to enhance this field in my country. And with the help of people who think the same as I after few years this field will become the major in * and it will have its place and influence in International markets.

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1. Well, I looked over the entire paper and made a few sentence and grammatical fixes. However, since this is your paper, I did not submit any new sentences because this should sound as much like you as possible. Here are my sentence by sentence changes: It is not a secret that * does not have enough natural resources; for example oil, gas or metals. And, as a result of political situation in the region, we are almost separated from the world. In my opinion our country must give particular attention to technological fields and information technologies mostly because this field needs only minor investments and qualified people resources. In order to attract international companies and interest them in opening branches there we much create flexible economic fields with low tax rates and opportunities to educate at a discount to maintain a highly qualified workforce. One very important fact is that information technology is very agile. The software, rather it be micro schema layout or aircraft strength design, can be delivered to a customer within a few seconds in any place in the world. My dream is to contribute to the development of this technology in my native country. This is the reason why I chose this profession and my desire to continue being educated in this field.