Plz someone who speaks English as their first language edit this short text?
Hi, I want to put this on me website. Thx ************ GoldenHost is the most complete website and ecommerce solution on the web. We have gathered everything needed to run a successful online business under one roof. On the web, most business web solutions are merely web hosts offering ecommerce features. Unlike these services, GoldenHost is a professional company involved in all phases of running online stores, including building, maintaining, and marketing. Each of our services is available separately, and you can select a mixture of those that you feel would be most beneficial to your business. A trustable company offering global services: Do you know how many businesses have been got online by GoldenHost, up to the current month? USA:2348, UK:403, Ca:388, India:107, Australia:96, China:44, Other Countries:109
Public Comments
- It is fine the way it is
- It looks fine to me. But, I'm not sure about the first line of the last paragraph using the semi-colon. It could be: A trustable company offering global services: Approxiamately (number of businesses) have been got online by GoldenHost, up to the current month. Unless a rhetorical question was the point of the sentence. In which case maybe replace the semi colon with a full stop. Don't take my word for it though, I might be completely wrong and you might be right. x
- my native tongue is spanish but I'm pretty sure I'm fluent in english. and the text looks fine to me :)
- Here are some tips: The first two paragraphs are kind of 'wordy'. Like "most complete" - is a little over the top, try just complete Replace "trustable" with trustworthy And instead of "...offering global services: Do you know how many businesses have been got online by GoldenHost, up to the current month? USA:2348, UK:403, Ca:388, India:107, Australia:96, China:44, Other Countries:109" maybe try something like "...offering global services. Current number of businesses online using GoldenHost: USA:2348, UK:403, Ca:388, India:107, Australia:96, China:44, Other Countries:109"
- yes
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